Search This Blog

Friday, March 23, 2012

Khushi's REVENGE - ASR's Seduction: Its a Game Two Can Play


Disclaimer 1 – I don't do hot scenes any justice. It’s the truth. No, no, I am not fishing for compliments. However, here is my second attempt (first being Arnav's gift). If you really want to knock your pants off, no literally, read Passions Avenue by HeadOverHeels, or Munchy’s Blog or Whispered Monologues by TeleFan. They do it much better.
Disclaimer 2 – I am at my wits end because the episodes are not inspiring me to write much. I like to pick scenes from the actual show and give it a seduction series spin. But I can’t quiet write a seduction scene about the canteen, right? Perhaps, I could. Hmmm.
Disclaimer 3 – Please don't tell me the last paragraph smacked of cliche. I know it is cliche. But it felt right to me and I wrote it. For the record, I don't condone or condemn virginity. 

Oh just read it already, and be kind with your comments.

A soft moan, a silent whimper escaped her. She couldn’t take the mix of pain and pleasure anymore.  She felt a tingle run up her arms and settle on the nape of her neck when he picked her fingers one at a time, put them in his warm moist mouth, sucked on them like they were nothing short of a delicious Popsicle. He repeated the action with her other fingers, each time savoring them with lush strokes of his tongue. She felt odd sensations having her finger sucked by him. “These fingers have magic in them Khushi”, he whispered between his ministrations, “They are delicious just like the food they make”, he continued. “Mmmm, Arnavji, it tickles”, she mumbled amidst her agony, squirming her shoulders as goose bumps settled on the arm with the fingers receiving his special attention. “Stop, please, before I die”, she pleaded. He did not relent, making sure every last finger of both hands were relished by his eager mouth.

Then just as suddenly, his strong arms held her wrists down, stretching her arms on either side. His stubbles tickled her ear as he sunk his nose into her thick hair, taking long deep breaths to inhale in her fragrance. His yearning body descended upon her, sinking her lower into the mattress under his sheer muscular weight. He peppered feather kisses along her left temple, following an excruciatingly slow and deliberate path along her hair line towards the other side of her face. It was a drug, an addictive narcotic, pulling her deeper into its web and she felt helpless, half asleep, and half awake under its influence. She struggled to peel her eyes open, caressing his cheeks with her long lustrous lashes in the process, causing him to shudder at that mere touch. She noticed his Adam ’s apple straining up and down as he swallowed hard and she felt an irresistible urge to kiss it. She licked it once with her tiny pink tongue.

He stopped his trail of kisses at the unexpected display of courage. He lifted his face over her, hovering millimeters away from hers, their breaths intermingling and warming each other’s faces, their smells becoming a combined symphony and their skins shining with a light sheen of perspiration, all the elements intermixing into a heady cocktail of lust. He looked at her, his eyes blazing raw passion and declaring their intent to continue this lustful journey.  He smiled and scooped down forcefully to claim her lips with a practiced authority. She in turn responded by opening her mouth, receiving him, matching his eagerness, and inviting him in with a desperate need of her own. “Mmmm”, he groaned with satisfaction at her openness. His tongue sought hers, as their lips and saliva greeted each other with joy. He traced his large hands down, finally reaching between her thighs, parting her legs, which offered little resistance. His fingers grazed over her curls, exploring, discovering and finally caressing her sensitive sweet spot.

“Aaah”, she cried in pure delight, a signal that it was a welcome gesture. He continued his torment, while deepening his kiss, his tongue mimicking a silent rhythm that his manhood screamed to follow. She arched her back to press herself against him and he obliged by circling his arm under her and roughly pulling her closer to him with nothing separating them but their inflamed skins. His need pressed harder into her belly and she instantly acknowledged it by rocking her belly against him. “Aaarnav,ohhhh”, she moaned yet again in between their kisses.

He broke their lip lock and dipped his head further, blazing a trail of kisses down the center of her body, and she began writhing in anticipation of what she thought was about to happen. Then, a tentative flick of his tongue and a first taste from him sent her screaming in pure frenzy.  “ Arnav please!” came the breathy approval, enough for him to begin his sweet assault on her, one that started from her center and fanned out like wildfire.  She screamed, she moaned, and she screamed some more.

Words tumbled out of her, of their own volition, asking him to go on forever and never stop. She whimpered and ached louder as she beat her head wildly side to side, sinking under the overwhelming sensations that threatened to push her over the edge of sanity. “Mmmm Khushi, you taste so sweet”, she heard him gasp. “Aah! Aapko meetha khana mana hai”, she countered as a matter of habit. His body shook with laughter but he was not about to stop. She thought she would explode with the odd new sensations welling inside her, ready to break the dam and flood her with fulfillment.

Her entire body began to shake uncontrollably, convulsively, helpless and possessed by forces unseen. Suddenly, she felt her shoulders gripped by vices, shaking her hard and beckoning her to wake up. A distant sound called her, getting louder by the moment….Khushiiii, Khushiiiii
“KHUSHIIII, KHUSHIIIII! Are you ok? Can you hear me? WAKE UP, KHUSHIIIIII, WAKE UP!!!”, ASR was shaking her by the shoulders.
She opened her eyes and looked blankly at him.
“Khushi, are you ok? Are you having a nightmare? You were shaking uncontrollably”, he asked.
Still in a trance, she blinked a few times, taking time to bring her back and take stock of what just happened. He was leaning over her, gripping her shoulders, genuine concern writ all over his face. She breathed in and exhaled.
“Khushi?”
“I am ok Arnavji, you can let go of my shoulders”, she composed herself.
He looked a bit surprised and recoiled at her sudden colness, “I, I thought you were having some sort of an episode”.
“I was”, she replied, pulling herself away from her dream of almost complete seduction and yet, still feeling the very real throbbing between her legs.
“Oh! OK. Do you want me to…”, he paused, unsure of the right platitude he could offer to calm her. She raised herself on her elbows, and scooted into a sitting position resting her back on the headboard.
“I will be fine Arnav ji, please don't worry about me, you can go back to sleep”, she said in a small voice, feeling guilty of her unexpected forage into a wet dream.

“Alright”, he stood up, “Call me if you need anything”. She could not meet his eyes for she was shrinking with embarrassment and guilt. She averted her gaze and spoke a bit too sternly than was needed, “I will be quite alright, thanks”.

He clearly picked up the dismissal and headed back to his poolside makeshift bed. Once safe, she shook her head in disapproval and a suppressed giggle left her. “Oh! My word! Did I just..oh no…hey Devi Maiyya! What a sordid dream! What’s happening to me?” she half smiled and half fretted over this new development of emotions in her. Here she was, all out to seduce the mighty ASR and instead, she ended up getting herself almost seduced, in a dream of course, but seduced nevertheless. She was a deep sleeper, but had never slept through anything like this before. She darted down under covers to hide herself from the silhouetted man stretching languidly by the pool, seemingly lost in his own dream. She shut her eyes tight.

ASR stared up the skies with a wicked smile on his face. He had gotten his first taste of her and good heaven’s she tasted sweeter than the Jalebi syrup she so loved. It was probably not right to do this to her, fully knowing that she slept like a log and a bomb blast couldn’t wake her from her cherished sleep. He could not help the sight of his nubile, sleeping wife, who had hours earlier signed the conjugal contract in a fit of fury and then had gone right ahead and breached it by pushing him out of the room. He had only wanted to find out if she felt anything for him and her response gave him all the assurance he could ever want. But he had to stop from going all the way with her, when she started shaking violently, almost scaring him that he might have pushed it too much, too soon for her. Judging by her reaction, he would have to take it very slow with her. She was an innocent, it was evident, and he felt an unprecedented pride at the knowledge that he would be the first one, perhaps the only one, to find out her intimate details, her little secrets, her quirks in bed and have the honor of teaching her the art of making love. His chest puffed with pride.

And then it happened….the first stab of guilt and pain at what he had done to her. But he wanted this with her, it had to happen, it felt so right. In that case, he assured himself, it will all happen in good time. The terrace was calm, the pool was calmer and the promise of a better scene tomorrow descended over Raizada Mansion.

-THE END??? You tell me.

And then it happened to you… The bedroom scene flashed through your mind, once more rearing its ugly head, and reminding you of your running obsession with ASR and all things IPKKND, your forgotten duty to your family and friends since June 6th, 2011, and your revenge on CVs for giving shitty tracks. And ya’ll collectively screamed, “Yes, Yes, Oh, Yes, We want MORE”. Presumptuous Me!

41 comments:

  1. Haha! The end was hilarious! And who told you that you can't do hot stuff? This was amazing!

    ReplyDelete
  2. Sree aka UniqueblueroseMarch 24, 2012 at 5:02 AM

    the Cliched end was the best here!!!!! Loved it!!!!

    ReplyDelete
  3. Hey that was awesome and well, hot indeed!! So so good!

    ReplyDelete
  4. We do want more! Haha absolutely loved it

    ReplyDelete
  5. lol... that was brilliant SJ *thumbs up*

    ReplyDelete
  6. dear lord!!! had to practically get into the freezer to cool down after reading that - you are a great writer and I cant wait to see where this story goes, so PLEASE PLEASE do continue.

    p.s. in case you are still wondering - you can DEFINITELY do hot stuff, but feel free to practise your writing some more ;)

    naina aka warriorprincess

    ReplyDelete
  7. SJ,

    i declare that i am your diehard fan!! I dont want the serial to end, lest we miss your musings!!!

    pikudika

    ReplyDelete
  8. I don't want it to end continue dear msin

    ReplyDelete
  9. This is the first time i am visiting ur blog smriti....love it...
    u r a brilliant writer

    shy

    ReplyDelete
  10. SJ
    Who the hell told you you cant write hot stuff???What wa awesome man wicked ASR god what a dream/ realify how delicious can this man get. Superb i loved it...
    Funny i always feel i am awful at the hot stuff too maybe pur imaginations are top hot for our writong skills he he he

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. yes TF, my mental imagery is better than my literary ability :)

      Delete
  11. “Mmmm Khushi, you taste so sweet”, she heard him gasp. “Aah! Aapko meetha khana mana hai”, she countered as a matter of habit. :D

    Amazing weaving of observations into prose, Smriti. Loved it.

    And wicked ASR. I am just trying to resist my laughter at the thought of what would have happened if you had posted this as it is on the forum.
    So, ASR tried to feel her up while she was sleeping....big deal?? didn't you see his hot, guilt-ridden face after that ?? and its not like Khushi was not enjoying it. She is equally to be blamed. Stupid girl, can't keep her cuteness in check even while sleeping. :P

    Anwesha.

    ReplyDelete
  12. that was well-written... the hot stuff do keep your readers hooked... khushi must really be a heavy sleeper if arnav did all that to her and put her clothes back on without her waking up and leaving her with the notion that it was just a dream! man, is he talented!! or did I fail to understand the latter half?

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. SHOOT!! I told you I can't write hot stuff. Ugh1 Now what do i with khushi's undone PJs, not my fault she didn't notice :(
      Lets just say its "Inception", what is real, what is fake, what was imagined and what was done, who knows? BWAHAHAHA!! :)

      Delete
  13. liked the tone but I am afraid hot stuff is not my thing :( weird when I am definitely part of the gutter club... but beautiful writing and great stuff

    ReplyDelete
  14. That was very well done!! ASR is a randy man isn't he! hahaha I love the word Randy! hahahah and yes it did rear it's sensual head that scene and reignited my obsession!!!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. and to think I have a coworker named Randy Adams. LOL. Now, you've ruined it for me, i won't be able to keep a straight face in meetings with Randy Adams! poor guy, i just hope he doesn't think i am making fun of him.

      Delete
  15. And then it happened….the first stab of guilt and pain at what he had done to her. But he wanted this with her, it had to happen, it felt so right. In that case, he assured himself, it will all happen in good time. The terrace was calm, the pool was calmer and the promise of a better scene tomorrow descended over Raizada Mansion.

    We live in eternal hope!!!! But what the......, I like this DIY take of yours very much, I am reading it with my morning dose of coffee, excellent start to the day!! But why have you forgotten that lock of hair at the nape of ASR's neck , I demand that lock please.!!!

    DrWho aka Manju

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. deal, about the tail-lock. how about we give it special treatment next round. we need a special name for it. any suggestions?

      Delete
    2. Love tail or love lock??? It is lovvvvvvvvely after all!!! If I think of anything else, shall let you know.

      Manju

      Delete
  16. “Aah! Aapko meetha khana mana hai”, she countered as a matter of habit. Ha..ha...Glad it was a real episode & not a dream.

    We have been living on ArHi dreams for too long!

    Smita

    ReplyDelete
  17. SJ seriously who told you, you can't write hot stuff??? This was a awesome part...

    But no no no no THE END.. YES YES YES We want more..

    Please continue this series if you can...

    ReplyDelete
  18. OMG this is an awesome piece of writing Smriti! Arnav is so ummm considerate? (Which he's not)
    Why did he stop!!??!!! ;)
    And how the hell did Kushi sleep through all of that :P had it been me.... ohhhh I shouldn't let my imagination go out of control.. ;)
    And next time, please let it go all the way. He absolutely cannot stop by just giving her head :P Hahahaha

    -Hiru (CDlove)

    ReplyDelete
  19. Chhaya aka arhi-fanMarch 25, 2012 at 5:56 AM

    I'm now a die hard fan of urs smriti. It was so freakin hot. N the cliched end was the best. But it was superb yar! And who says u cant write such stuff u r the best at it.

    ReplyDelete
  20. And you say you can't right hot stuff! Awesome, loved it and ending was hilarious.:)

    kasturi

    ReplyDelete
  21. SJ, Nice little twist in the end - didn't see that err.... coming! :D

    I'll join everyone else and ask if you really believe that you can't write steamy stuff? Really??? Do you want us to simply combust? ;) . Loved the postscript --- definitely ready to slip into Oliver Twist mode!

    Btw, like the new spring look for your blog :)

    ReplyDelete
  22. Who says you are not good at this stuff? On a Saturday evening, with rain pounding outside and wind howling, I had the Star Parivaar awards on and at the same time reading this.......OMG, I can not ask for better.

    As for cliche, remember that you are writing for enjoyment and we are reading for the same, so it isn't necessary to adhere to some social agenda or progressiveness in every instance. I thought, just like you that this was a natural thought in this instance.
    Write more.
    ANamika100

    ReplyDelete
  23. hahahaa... we definitely want more! i love this series :))) arnav is truly so wicked ;)love your musings!

    ReplyDelete
  24. Who says you can't write hot stuff? This was great lol - it made me laugh

    ReplyDelete
  25. The ending was awesome!!!! So true :))
    Beautiful writing

    Tttttt1

    ReplyDelete
  26. Dont end.. gasping for more.. That was totally awesome.. Am still feeling the heat and panting.. :D
    Great work SJ

    ReplyDelete
  27. Hot hot hot SJ!
    He is such a devil!

    Hot and ruthless seductions like him! Want more... ;p

    Sjm15 from IF

    ReplyDelete
  28. Oh wow!! that was brilliant...loved the ending...what a twist....LMFAO....
    Arhimaniac from IF

    ReplyDelete
  29. LOVED IT every single word of it :)

    ReplyDelete
  30. that was awesome and Hot
    and that twist was hilarious

    ReplyDelete
  31. cliched or not ...loved it ...I am sure the smirk while he was alone at the poolside would be awesome....
    tibs from IF aka Aditi

    ReplyDelete
  32. Smriti....I don't know what makes you say that you can't write hot stuff coz Arnav's Gift is still one of my favorite works by you .... and so is this but I must admit just when it was getting super Hawt, you bought in the dream twist(which does not seem to be happening with IPK now-a-days) ....

    As all your works are SJ..this too was FAB :-)

    Sorry for the late reply Smrits

    Parul @ ipkkndfan_29

    ReplyDelete
  33. Not only was that hot, it was genius!!

    ReplyDelete
  34. OMG This was brilliant! And who said u cant do hot scenes....they are lying!! You made my fantasy (Of Arnav and Khushi to share hot scene) come true! LOL. Are you going to continue? Please do! xx

    ReplyDelete
  35. the best Cliche ever!! .....awesome take a bow.....but khatam kiu hua..........:(

    ReplyDelete