Disclaimer 1 – I don't do hot scenes any justice. It’s the truth. No, no, I am not fishing for compliments. However, here is my second attempt (first being Arnav's gift). If you really want to knock your pants off, no literally,
read Passions Avenue by HeadOverHeels, or Munchy’s Blog or Whispered Monologues
by TeleFan. They do it much better.
Disclaimer 2 – I am at my wits end because
the episodes are not inspiring me to write much. I like to pick scenes from the
actual show and give it a seduction series spin. But I can’t quiet write a
seduction scene about the canteen, right? Perhaps, I could. Hmmm.
Disclaimer 3 – Please don't tell me the last paragraph smacked of cliche. I know it is cliche. But it felt right to me and I wrote it. For the record, I don't condone or condemn virginity.
Oh just read it already, and be kind with your comments.
Oh just read it already, and be kind with your comments.
A soft moan,
a silent whimper escaped her. She couldn’t take the mix of pain and pleasure
anymore. She felt a tingle run up her
arms and settle on the nape of her neck when he picked her fingers one at a
time, put them in his warm moist mouth, sucked on them like they were nothing
short of a delicious Popsicle. He repeated the action with her other fingers,
each time savoring them with lush strokes of his tongue. She felt odd
sensations having her finger sucked by him. “These fingers have magic in them Khushi”, he whispered between his ministrations, “They are delicious just like
the food they make”, he continued. “Mmmm, Arnavji, it tickles”, she mumbled
amidst her agony, squirming her shoulders as goose bumps settled on the arm
with the fingers receiving his special attention. “Stop, please, before I die”,
she pleaded. He did not relent, making sure every last finger of both hands
were relished by his eager mouth.
Then just as
suddenly, his strong arms held her wrists down, stretching her arms on either side.
His stubbles tickled her ear as he sunk his nose into her thick hair, taking
long deep breaths to inhale in her fragrance. His yearning body descended upon
her, sinking her lower into the mattress under his sheer muscular weight. He
peppered feather kisses along her left temple, following an excruciatingly slow
and deliberate path along her hair line towards the other side of her face. It
was a drug, an addictive narcotic, pulling her deeper into its web and she felt
helpless, half asleep, and half awake under its influence. She struggled to
peel her eyes open, caressing his cheeks with her long lustrous lashes in the
process, causing him to shudder at that mere touch. She noticed his Adam ’s
apple straining up and down as he swallowed hard and she felt an irresistible
urge to kiss it. She licked it once with her tiny pink tongue.
He stopped
his trail of kisses at the unexpected display of courage. He lifted his face over
her, hovering millimeters away from hers, their breaths intermingling and
warming each other’s faces, their smells becoming a combined symphony and their
skins shining with a light sheen of perspiration, all the elements intermixing into a heady
cocktail of lust. He looked at her, his eyes blazing raw passion and declaring
their intent to continue this lustful journey. He smiled and scooped down forcefully to claim
her lips with a practiced authority. She in turn responded by opening her mouth,
receiving him, matching his eagerness, and inviting him in with a desperate need
of her own. “Mmmm”, he groaned with satisfaction at her openness. His tongue
sought hers, as their lips and saliva greeted each other with joy. He traced his
large hands down, finally reaching between her thighs, parting her legs, which
offered little resistance. His fingers grazed over her curls, exploring,
discovering and finally caressing her sensitive sweet spot.
“Aaah”, she cried
in pure delight, a signal that it was a welcome gesture. He continued his
torment, while deepening his kiss, his tongue mimicking a silent rhythm that
his manhood screamed to follow. She arched her back to press herself against him
and he obliged by circling his arm under her and roughly pulling her closer to
him with nothing separating them but their inflamed skins. His need pressed
harder into her belly and she instantly acknowledged it by rocking her belly against
him. “Aaarnav,ohhhh”, she moaned yet again in between their kisses.
He broke
their lip lock and dipped his head further, blazing a trail of kisses down the
center of her body, and she began writhing in anticipation of what she thought
was about to happen. Then, a tentative flick of his tongue and a first taste from
him sent her screaming in pure frenzy. “
Arnav please!” came the breathy approval, enough for him to begin his sweet assault
on her, one that started from her center and fanned out like wildfire. She screamed, she moaned, and she screamed
some more.
Words
tumbled out of her, of their own volition, asking him to go on forever and
never stop. She whimpered and ached louder as she beat her head wildly side to
side, sinking under the overwhelming sensations that threatened to push her
over the edge of sanity. “Mmmm Khushi, you taste so sweet”, she heard him gasp.
“Aah! Aapko meetha khana mana hai”, she countered as a matter of habit. His
body shook with laughter but he was not about to stop. She thought she would
explode with the odd new sensations welling inside her, ready to break the dam
and flood her with fulfillment.
Her entire body
began to shake uncontrollably, convulsively, helpless and possessed by forces
unseen. Suddenly, she felt her shoulders gripped by vices, shaking her hard and
beckoning her to wake up. A distant sound called her, getting louder by the
moment….Khushiiii, Khushiiiii
“KHUSHIIII,
KHUSHIIIII! Are you ok? Can you hear me? WAKE UP, KHUSHIIIIII, WAKE UP!!!”, ASR
was shaking her by the shoulders.
She opened
her eyes and looked blankly at him.
“Khushi, are
you ok? Are you having a nightmare? You were shaking uncontrollably”, he asked.
Still in a
trance, she blinked a few times, taking time to bring her back and take stock
of what just happened. He was leaning over her, gripping her shoulders, genuine
concern writ all over his face. She breathed in and exhaled.
“Khushi?”
“I am ok
Arnavji, you can let go of my shoulders”, she composed herself.
He looked a
bit surprised and recoiled at her sudden colness, “I, I thought you were having
some sort of an episode”.
“I was”, she
replied, pulling herself away from her dream of almost complete seduction and yet, still feeling the very real throbbing between
her legs.
“Oh! OK. Do
you want me to…”, he paused, unsure of the right platitude he could offer to
calm her. She raised herself on her elbows, and scooted into a sitting position
resting her back on the headboard.
“I will be
fine Arnav ji, please don't worry about me, you can go back to sleep”, she said
in a small voice, feeling guilty of her unexpected forage into a wet dream.
“Alright”,
he stood up, “Call me if you need anything”. She could not meet his eyes for she
was shrinking with embarrassment and guilt. She averted her gaze and spoke a
bit too sternly than was needed, “I will be quite alright, thanks”.
He clearly picked
up the dismissal and headed back to his poolside makeshift bed. Once safe, she
shook her head in disapproval and a suppressed giggle left her. “Oh! My word!
Did I just..oh no…hey Devi Maiyya! What a sordid dream! What’s happening to me?” she half smiled and half
fretted over this new development of emotions in her. Here she was, all out to
seduce the mighty ASR and instead, she ended up getting herself almost seduced, in a
dream of course, but seduced nevertheless. She was a deep sleeper, but had
never slept through anything like this before. She darted down under covers to
hide herself from the silhouetted man stretching languidly by the pool, seemingly
lost in his own dream. She shut her eyes tight.
ASR stared
up the skies with a wicked smile on his face. He had gotten his first taste of
her and good heaven’s she tasted sweeter than the Jalebi syrup she so loved. It
was probably not right to do this to her, fully knowing that she slept like a
log and a bomb blast couldn’t wake her from her cherished sleep. He could not
help the sight of his nubile, sleeping wife, who had hours earlier signed the
conjugal contract in a fit of fury and then had gone right ahead and breached
it by pushing him out of the room. He had only wanted to find out if she felt anything for him and her response gave him all the assurance he could ever want. But he had to stop from going all the way with her, when she started shaking
violently, almost scaring him that he might have pushed it too much, too soon for her. Judging by her reaction, he would have to take it very slow with her. She was an innocent, it was
evident, and he felt an unprecedented pride at the knowledge that he would be
the first one, perhaps the only one, to find out her intimate details, her
little secrets, her quirks in bed and have the honor of teaching her the art of
making love. His chest puffed with pride.
And then it
happened….the first stab of guilt and pain at what he had done to her. But he
wanted this with her, it had to happen, it felt so right. In that case, he
assured himself, it will all happen in good time. The terrace was calm, the
pool was calmer and the promise of a better scene tomorrow descended over
Raizada Mansion.
-THE END???
You tell me.
And then it
happened to you… The bedroom scene flashed through your mind, once more
rearing its ugly head, and reminding you of your running obsession with ASR and
all things IPKKND, your forgotten duty to your family and friends since June 6th, 2011, and your revenge on CVs for giving shitty tracks. And ya’ll
collectively screamed, “Yes, Yes, Oh, Yes, We want MORE”. Presumptuous Me!
Haha! The end was hilarious! And who told you that you can't do hot stuff? This was amazing!
ReplyDeletethe Cliched end was the best here!!!!! Loved it!!!!
ReplyDeleteHey that was awesome and well, hot indeed!! So so good!
ReplyDeleteWe do want more! Haha absolutely loved it
ReplyDeletelol... that was brilliant SJ *thumbs up*
ReplyDeletedear lord!!! had to practically get into the freezer to cool down after reading that - you are a great writer and I cant wait to see where this story goes, so PLEASE PLEASE do continue.
ReplyDeletep.s. in case you are still wondering - you can DEFINITELY do hot stuff, but feel free to practise your writing some more ;)
naina aka warriorprincess
SJ,
ReplyDeletei declare that i am your diehard fan!! I dont want the serial to end, lest we miss your musings!!!
pikudika
I don't want it to end continue dear msin
ReplyDeleteThat was very hot...
ReplyDeleteThis is the first time i am visiting ur blog smriti....love it...
ReplyDeleteu r a brilliant writer
shy
SJ
ReplyDeleteWho the hell told you you cant write hot stuff???What wa awesome man wicked ASR god what a dream/ realify how delicious can this man get. Superb i loved it...
Funny i always feel i am awful at the hot stuff too maybe pur imaginations are top hot for our writong skills he he he
yes TF, my mental imagery is better than my literary ability :)
Delete“Mmmm Khushi, you taste so sweet”, she heard him gasp. “Aah! Aapko meetha khana mana hai”, she countered as a matter of habit. :D
ReplyDeleteAmazing weaving of observations into prose, Smriti. Loved it.
And wicked ASR. I am just trying to resist my laughter at the thought of what would have happened if you had posted this as it is on the forum.
So, ASR tried to feel her up while she was sleeping....big deal?? didn't you see his hot, guilt-ridden face after that ?? and its not like Khushi was not enjoying it. She is equally to be blamed. Stupid girl, can't keep her cuteness in check even while sleeping. :P
Anwesha.
that was well-written... the hot stuff do keep your readers hooked... khushi must really be a heavy sleeper if arnav did all that to her and put her clothes back on without her waking up and leaving her with the notion that it was just a dream! man, is he talented!! or did I fail to understand the latter half?
ReplyDeleteSHOOT!! I told you I can't write hot stuff. Ugh1 Now what do i with khushi's undone PJs, not my fault she didn't notice :(
DeleteLets just say its "Inception", what is real, what is fake, what was imagined and what was done, who knows? BWAHAHAHA!! :)
liked the tone but I am afraid hot stuff is not my thing :( weird when I am definitely part of the gutter club... but beautiful writing and great stuff
ReplyDeleteThat was very well done!! ASR is a randy man isn't he! hahaha I love the word Randy! hahahah and yes it did rear it's sensual head that scene and reignited my obsession!!!
ReplyDeleteand to think I have a coworker named Randy Adams. LOL. Now, you've ruined it for me, i won't be able to keep a straight face in meetings with Randy Adams! poor guy, i just hope he doesn't think i am making fun of him.
DeleteAnd then it happened….the first stab of guilt and pain at what he had done to her. But he wanted this with her, it had to happen, it felt so right. In that case, he assured himself, it will all happen in good time. The terrace was calm, the pool was calmer and the promise of a better scene tomorrow descended over Raizada Mansion.
ReplyDeleteWe live in eternal hope!!!! But what the......, I like this DIY take of yours very much, I am reading it with my morning dose of coffee, excellent start to the day!! But why have you forgotten that lock of hair at the nape of ASR's neck , I demand that lock please.!!!
DrWho aka Manju
deal, about the tail-lock. how about we give it special treatment next round. we need a special name for it. any suggestions?
DeleteLove tail or love lock??? It is lovvvvvvvvely after all!!! If I think of anything else, shall let you know.
DeleteManju
“Aah! Aapko meetha khana mana hai”, she countered as a matter of habit. Ha..ha...Glad it was a real episode & not a dream.
ReplyDeleteWe have been living on ArHi dreams for too long!
Smita
SJ seriously who told you, you can't write hot stuff??? This was a awesome part...
ReplyDeleteBut no no no no THE END.. YES YES YES We want more..
Please continue this series if you can...
OMG this is an awesome piece of writing Smriti! Arnav is so ummm considerate? (Which he's not)
ReplyDeleteWhy did he stop!!??!!! ;)
And how the hell did Kushi sleep through all of that :P had it been me.... ohhhh I shouldn't let my imagination go out of control.. ;)
And next time, please let it go all the way. He absolutely cannot stop by just giving her head :P Hahahaha
-Hiru (CDlove)
I'm now a die hard fan of urs smriti. It was so freakin hot. N the cliched end was the best. But it was superb yar! And who says u cant write such stuff u r the best at it.
ReplyDeleteAnd you say you can't right hot stuff! Awesome, loved it and ending was hilarious.:)
ReplyDeletekasturi
SJ, Nice little twist in the end - didn't see that err.... coming! :D
ReplyDeleteI'll join everyone else and ask if you really believe that you can't write steamy stuff? Really??? Do you want us to simply combust? ;) . Loved the postscript --- definitely ready to slip into Oliver Twist mode!
Btw, like the new spring look for your blog :)
Who says you are not good at this stuff? On a Saturday evening, with rain pounding outside and wind howling, I had the Star Parivaar awards on and at the same time reading this.......OMG, I can not ask for better.
ReplyDeleteAs for cliche, remember that you are writing for enjoyment and we are reading for the same, so it isn't necessary to adhere to some social agenda or progressiveness in every instance. I thought, just like you that this was a natural thought in this instance.
Write more.
ANamika100
hahahaa... we definitely want more! i love this series :))) arnav is truly so wicked ;)love your musings!
ReplyDeleteWho says you can't write hot stuff? This was great lol - it made me laugh
ReplyDeleteThe ending was awesome!!!! So true :))
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing
Tttttt1
Dont end.. gasping for more.. That was totally awesome.. Am still feeling the heat and panting.. :D
ReplyDeleteGreat work SJ
Hot hot hot SJ!
ReplyDeleteHe is such a devil!
Hot and ruthless seductions like him! Want more... ;p
Sjm15 from IF
Oh wow!! that was brilliant...loved the ending...what a twist....LMFAO....
ReplyDeleteArhimaniac from IF
LOVED IT every single word of it :)
ReplyDeletethat was awesome and Hot
ReplyDeleteand that twist was hilarious
cliched or not ...loved it ...I am sure the smirk while he was alone at the poolside would be awesome....
ReplyDeletetibs from IF aka Aditi
Smriti....I don't know what makes you say that you can't write hot stuff coz Arnav's Gift is still one of my favorite works by you .... and so is this but I must admit just when it was getting super Hawt, you bought in the dream twist(which does not seem to be happening with IPK now-a-days) ....
ReplyDeleteAs all your works are SJ..this too was FAB :-)
Sorry for the late reply Smrits
Parul @ ipkkndfan_29
Not only was that hot, it was genius!!
ReplyDeleteOMG This was brilliant! And who said u cant do hot scenes....they are lying!! You made my fantasy (Of Arnav and Khushi to share hot scene) come true! LOL. Are you going to continue? Please do! xx
ReplyDeletethe best Cliche ever!! .....awesome take a bow.....but khatam kiu hua..........:(
ReplyDelete